Monday, December 1, 2008

Dear Christine,

You're unfettered.
I'm unfurled,
open to the wind,

rolled out like a mat
to be trampled, mud and
sand and fiber.

I'm spread out on a table
hungry for the feast,
burning with candles.

I'm released from the
sternum of romantic love
cracked open and falling

out onto the floor
like yards of intestines
stretching snake-like

basking in sunlight.
I'm an uncoiled slinky
no longer slinking.

I'm tentacles flat
on the ocean
floor.

This is in response to Christine's poem
"Dear Holly."
: balanced on the edge

13 comments:

christine said...

Wow, so many great images, one right after the other. You've made a wonderful poem! OK, sista, I'll get to work.

Jo said...

wow indeed. The first four stanzas of this are amazing (and the rest is really good too).

Kristin Dombrowski said...

Strong and active language! I love your work, and would love it if you could drop by my blog sometime to!

Scot said...

the image is exceptionaly strong

Julie said...

Woo hoo!! This is awesome, Holly! I loved your poem, then I loved Christine's response, and now I love your poem again! I do love the energy and rhythm and word play of those first three stanzas, though it's all an awesome read. Unfurled is an excellent description. If y'all don't mind, I will keep your name on the pieces but print them out right now. I want to see them one after the other. Please keep them coming!

Dana said...

"I'm released from the
sternum of romantic love
cracked open and falling

out onto the floor
like yards of intestines
stretching snake-like

basking in sunlight."

This is a fantastic image.

holly said...

Thank you all! I am enjoying this process with Christine. We have taken cues from, or rather "copied" what Dana and Nathan have been doing. They are good inspiration!

christine said...

Holly, I hope you don't mind, I linked your poem to RWP since it was a collaborative poetry prompt. :-)

holly said...

not at all!

Nathan said...

Yes, the "sternum of romantic love" is wonderful. The whole poem is great. You and christine have really got something going here.

gautami tripathy said...

This rolls off well!

keep it burning, keep it alive

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

Your poem looks like a chain. The stanzas are links that lead on to the next image, to the next image, and so forth. Well connected. Good flow.

Also, I love the phrase "sternum of romantic love".

-Nicole

holly said...

Thank you Nicole and Gautami.
I would like to comment on your site, Gautami, but I have not been able to do so for some reason.