You're unfettered.
I'm unfurled,
open to the wind,
rolled out like a mat
to be trampled, mud and
sand and fiber.
I'm spread out on a table
hungry for the feast,
burning with candles.
I'm released from the
sternum of romantic love
cracked open and falling
out onto the floor
like yards of intestines
stretching snake-like
basking in sunlight.
I'm an uncoiled slinky
no longer slinking.
I'm tentacles flat
on the ocean
floor.
This is in response to Christine's poem
"Dear Holly.": balanced on the edge
13 comments:
Wow, so many great images, one right after the other. You've made a wonderful poem! OK, sista, I'll get to work.
wow indeed. The first four stanzas of this are amazing (and the rest is really good too).
Strong and active language! I love your work, and would love it if you could drop by my blog sometime to!
the image is exceptionaly strong
Woo hoo!! This is awesome, Holly! I loved your poem, then I loved Christine's response, and now I love your poem again! I do love the energy and rhythm and word play of those first three stanzas, though it's all an awesome read. Unfurled is an excellent description. If y'all don't mind, I will keep your name on the pieces but print them out right now. I want to see them one after the other. Please keep them coming!
"I'm released from the
sternum of romantic love
cracked open and falling
out onto the floor
like yards of intestines
stretching snake-like
basking in sunlight."
This is a fantastic image.
Thank you all! I am enjoying this process with Christine. We have taken cues from, or rather "copied" what Dana and Nathan have been doing. They are good inspiration!
Holly, I hope you don't mind, I linked your poem to RWP since it was a collaborative poetry prompt. :-)
not at all!
Yes, the "sternum of romantic love" is wonderful. The whole poem is great. You and christine have really got something going here.
This rolls off well!
keep it burning, keep it alive
Your poem looks like a chain. The stanzas are links that lead on to the next image, to the next image, and so forth. Well connected. Good flow.
Also, I love the phrase "sternum of romantic love".
-Nicole
Thank you Nicole and Gautami.
I would like to comment on your site, Gautami, but I have not been able to do so for some reason.
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