Sunday, July 20, 2008

Wow, I think my umbilical cord

is still attached.
It's not about me

and my inability
to keep my idealistic
(still pretty much in the womb,
why aren't you happy)
ideas

to myself.

I scrape the crud from the bottom
of the coffee cup (as though
I could reuse the placenta)

and I want to help you to be
reborn
(God is certainly laughing)

when I cannot even
keep up with
my (wipe my own butt)
self.


This is written from a prompt on Pen Me a Poem...link on this page...thanks Edward!

6 comments:

Beaman said...

This is a good example of dry humour I think. A little hard to understand the context but that leaves it open to many possibilities which is equally as valid.

I sense the subject of the poem is feeling an inability of sorts that reminds them of birth and the desire to be reborn.

I like the additions in brackets.

Many thanks for entering this week's Pen Me A Poem Poetry Prompt. :)

holly said...

Thank you...yes, I think I have spent a number of years writing more careful, pensive poetry, and I like the idea of droll, even self-effacing humor (I like the British spelling of that word better-"humour") These are things I am exploring.

Julie said...

Honkycackle! Good grief...I can't believe you've been under my nose all this time (on Scot's website), and I haven't seen you! You are awesome. And...you love CHEESE GRITS! Are you my sister?

You're probably thinking, "Yeah, it's that weird woman who tells everybody how awesome they are." But I really don't tell everybody that. Only people I think are good.

It might just be me, but I get this poem totally. It's funny to me, not in a dry "hmph-hmph" way, but in a slap my knee oh hell YEAH kind of way. It also has a darker level, too, and that is cool. I like your style. Thanks for commenting at my site, so I can get to know you. I'm linking to you now, but you don't have to link to me. Seriously. I really don't sit up at night and worry about stats. So that's no pressure.

But thanks for sharing. I like what I see in your older posts, too. It's nice to meet you.

holly said...

Thanks Julie...I linked to your site anyway...because I like it. Sisters? Of course...we live here on this earth together.

j said...

good job! certinaly a different take.

jorc
empty garden

holly said...

thanks jorc! will visit your site!